Henry’s first post.

This is a story called the X in the Rock.

One day there was a rock. His name was Fred. He liked his friends, the knights. One knight was a very strong knight and one knight was a very fast knight. And they were all friends. The little knight was the fastest so he was the brother and the other knight was the strongest so he was the big brother.

The rock was stuck together with very very very very very very sticky glue. The rock could only be split apart with! The! Powerful knife. Four people had to hold it, I mean five people, to split the rock. I’m going to draw the big knife. [Henry draws the knife cutting the rock in half.] Now it’s in half. So the big X is actually a real treasure. But do you know what’s the problem? The glue can’t get unstuck! The rock is just stuck together. So they called for help. And do you know what they saw running toward them? In the darkness they saw a shadow. It wasn’t to a monster. It wasn’t to an alien. And it wasn’t to a spooky thing. When the sun came up they saw it was the Dag Knight. He thought they were calling for him so he just ran over! His castle was nearby.

And you know what the real problem was? No treasure was in there. And they decided, where’s the treasure? This is not a treasure rock! This is just a plain rock! That X was just a trick for you, silly!

Comments

[ozma]

Great comment on greed and the foolhardiness it brings. I see screenwriting potential as well.

[Dmom]

I was NOT expecting such a twist at the end!!! Treasure Rock 4.2....what a treasure!

PS 4 is a big fat pain in the....4. But 5 gets better, start your countdown soon! A mom at the park told me every other age is good, but the even ages, 2,4,6..not so good.Merry Christmas!

[tara]

best. story. ever.

[Chookooloonks]

Dude. You SO have some serious competition.

[mom on a wire]

"it wasn’t to a spooky thing" would make the most AWESOME band name.

[Brooke]

That just happens to be the denouement of my latest novel: someone scary runs over but it turns out he thought the protagonist was just calling his name. The end.

Damn it! Trumped by a 4.2-year-old! And I thought it was so original.

[elise]

Like any truly exceptional piece of literature, I had to re-read that one a couple of times before I got its brilliance.

[Shannon]

beautiful

[erika]

That was fantastic!

[motherbumper]

Splendid and fast paced, it got right to the point and that is my kind of post. Well done.

[Stefanie]

I just read this to my son Liam (v3.5). He would like to tell a story, too, but he can't think of one right now, except the one with the sticky rock and the knights and the treasure. If you tell him another story, Liam (who thinks it's very important to type his name in himself) might think of it.

Please spell bus. But if you can't it's OK, because he can.

[Steph.]

What a clever mind on such a little boy! I bet you can't wait to see what he does with all of that creativity when he grows up. Neat!

[Nothing But Bonfires]

I love that the Dag Knight ran over because "his castle was nearby." Convenient, too, should he ever need to borrow a cup of sugar for an apple pie he might be baking.

[kerflop]

Jake would like Henry to please come over and play now.

[LetterB]

Righteous! Methinks I see a saga coming.

[Krisco]

You can see where clearly the talent is passing on...

[rachel]

Does this remind anyone of that old folk song One Tin Soldier?

[Anne]

Nanowrimo superstar at 4!

[kyran]

I coudn't help but go all Clarissa Pinkola Estes and read this as an archetypal story filled with messages from the unconscious.

What it says to me is, the kid wants brothers.

Nothing puts Four in perspective like sharing a bedroom with Six and Two.

[Sara]

I need some of that glue that won't unstick for my 5.5 and 2.5! That would solve untold problems. Well done, Henry!

[christy]

Awesome story. I would love to see it fully illustrated.

[JB]

Well, that was practically O'Henry at the end there. Now they've gone and ruined their rock, and there was no treasure inside.

Or is that the goose and the golden eggs...?

[JB]

Er... O. Henry. Whoops.

[chirky]

Henry should TOTALLY have a podcast.

[Kelly]

Henry has talent. I love the idea of capturing his story. I'll have to try that with my little guy.